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My Immortal, special revoiw 1

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I have decided, since I saw people doing it, inspiration struck me HARD! to do reviews on the worst fanfiction ever! "My Immortal" Tara honey...what drugs are you on and where can I get some. I will be posting the text from the story, my comments will be like this Story belongs to Tara Gilesbie

SO HERE I GO! Pray for me please -_-

Chapter 1

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!

*What is this supposed to be!? Is this...WORDS? No possible way that this shit is written in english. Must in enochian or something because I can barely understand it already!*

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Hi my name is Ebony Dark’ness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black hair (that’s how I got my name)

* So.you have had long ebony black hair since you were born? Very interesting. Please continue to melt my brain -_- *

with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don’t know who she is get da hell out of here!). I’m not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he’s a major fucking hottie. I’m a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. I have pale white skin.

* I really don't care what you look like OR if you think Gerard Way is hot. Where is your story?*

I’m also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England where I’m in the seventh year (I’m seventeen).

* NO! I thought you were 90! *rolls eyes* *

I’m a goth (in case you couldn’t tell) and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow.

* You must be really full of yourself. I didn't know shopping at Hot Topic made you a goth.Damn I must be super goth then. haha *

I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.

* Snowing is fine. But snowing AND raining? Do you mean sleet. Because I'm pretty sure that it can ot rain and snow at the same time. *

“Hey Ebony!” shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy!

* I am....Not impressed. *

“What’s up Draco?” I asked.

“Nothing.” he said shyly.

* Since when is Draco shy? I thought he was always a cocky little fucker?*

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.

* And a graceful exit from Ebony*

Wow my brain is dead. OH I found it here...
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Your handwriting dear, is a fail